Lone shoes -- Closed 16/04/2007

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Spastica and I have agreed to alternate exercises: every exercise will last four weeks (for those who can’t cope with deadlines), and a new exercise will be posted every two weeks. This way, there always is an exercise running. Some exercises will be one-off assignments, others will gradually be elaborated on in later instalments. This exercise deals with action and characters doing things; future exercises will ask you to expand on the action. That does not mean you’ll have to participate in all future exercises in this series, or that you can’t jump on the wagon (or off it) further down the road.

Exercise: Write an explanation for the single shoe phenomenon — the single shoes you sometimes see lying on the side of the road

All you need to explain the phenomenon is action: don’t describe a situation, and don’t describe your characters (or the shoe/sandal/boot/…). You will be adding those parts later on.

 Rules

  • You have about 200 words
  • There are at least two characters
  • The story will have a beginning, a middle and an end
  • Don’t bother too much with a description of your characters, the setting, the mood or any exposition or stream of consciousness; keep thoughts to a strict minimum. The idea is that you focus on an original idea and the action first.
  • Don’t generalise (“People hang their feet out of the window”), but try to pin your explanation down to a single instance (“John left his foot hanging out of the window”.
  • You must use the word “action”

Judging

Submissions will be rated on how closely they follow the rules; on originality; and overall quality.

Submissions

You can submit your entry by adding a comment to this post.

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She knew he was going to

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She knew he was going to kill her, whenever he got done doing whatever it was he was going to do. And she had made peace with that. But this was happening now, and it was happening too fast. The car seemed to be swerving, although she couldn't tell if he was taking the corners too fast or if he was just...out of control. "God DAMN it!" she heard him shout from the front seat as the car shook again. She looked up at the ceiling, out through the windows. Trees rushed past and then something else. A flash of light. Red light, then blue. There was a police car behind them. There were policemen chasing this car. She had to get out- she had to- let them know she was here- if she didn't they would keep chasing him until he crashed the car and then she would surely die. Her legs were bound together with duct tape, just above the knees, and down around the ankles. Her arms were bound to her torso with duct tape that wrapped around her shoulders, upper and lower arms. There was still a piece of duct tape over her mouth, but her blindfold had come off somewhere along the way. She lifted her feet up and placed them against the window. "God Damn it, get your legs down, you bitch!" he screamed at her. She looked at him for a second as she readied herself, then kicked at the window with all her might. The action shattered the window. She tried to pull her legs back in, but her jeans were caught on a shard of glass. "You BITCH! Now I am gonna kill you" he said and pointed the gun at her. She jerked her legs back in the car, tearing her jeans, tearing the duct tape. Her right shoe had come off. It was no doubt lying by the road somewhere. She prayed that the police would see it.

Calling Card

The slut hitchhiker took a doctored diet Pepsi from the cooler, according to plan. After her eyes closed, the trucker eased the truck over and parked. After waiting for a while, he reached into the bag behind the seat for the knife, but he wasn't quiet enough this time. He looked over and saw the slut's eyes wide open. This bitch hadn't drunk enough soda. Then he saw the gun. He ignored the slut's screamed threats and watched her fumble with the door, waiting. Her eyes slid off him for an instant, and he lunged. Her fingers found the latch, and they both tumbled out on the roadside. The trucker lost his hold on the hand with the gun but recovered quickly, raising the knife. The slut was quicker, and the gun coughed twice. She pulled free of him and started to climb back into the cab. He threw himself at her again, but she kicked him in his already screaming gut. His hand came away with one of her sneakers as he fell. She slammed and locked the door. The trucker's last action was to watch the slut steal his truck as he died and the shoe fell from his hand on the roadside, his calling card according to a plan gone very wrong.

One Boot, No Feet

It started out to be the same. the heavy garments grabbing each form, arms jerked through sleevelles, hood clasped to head by Dresser, rushing to the time-teller, as choking blinders, ankles flipped until within deep-throated boothers, feet secured the uppers action of chewing legs step by step. At SwampedLand,chaos crowned. Frozkin so holey no passage can make. Huge loud formless known only by what is not within it, stumbly rumbling sound and shakes deep beneath. This One makes humbly nigh; streaks of unrelated matter jagged down to One's proffered back, not heavy but so cumbersome, begins a slide deeper sucked that footed boothen unyet the tender loosens of plate and loop and... Footloose! One slipped from the boothen, the wraith slipped from One and as do feel long locks unleashed, from One's very back, loosed long wands of pinky silk unrolling with supporting wind. One and Others, higher, higher. One concerned for balance, beauty, free, worked the last boother loose, it spiral flew to near the mate under the Slew by the path just new.

Shoe

The flag unfurled in the summer breeze, its crescent dragon writhing as it danced above the procession of soldiers making their way through the great oaks. The trek from village to castle had lasted all day, taking a toll on the workers, leaving them tired and listless. Inside the carriage, the man cleared his throat with muted humilty.

"M'lady."

The lady Morden turned to face him, smiling after the fact. She let the drape fall to cover the window behind her, and leaned back into her leather seat, taking in the sound of the carriage wheels slowly turning, the smell of the horses. She sighed and closed her eyes, but sat back up within seconds.

"But Dane, they are so battered. Don't we have clothing..."

"M'lady please. You know we cannot feed the world. Nor can we clothe them. We are providing them work, and we will pay them accordingly."

"But you said we would take action . Bringing a handful of peasants to the castle is hardly action."

Odors of the fish market drifted into the carriage, and the lady raised the drape at the side door. Outside, the cobblestone gleamed, buyers and sellers haggling over scales holding bits of herring and crab. Following the carriage, one of the peasants wore a shoe so tattered, his toes were not covered. He was a small man, and showed many years of labor. Lady Morden pushed her leg out of the carriage, drawing the attention of some of the people in the market, but she didn't care. Without a moment's hesitation, she plucked her shoe off, and let it fall. She pulled her foot back in. Behind them, the man knelt beside her shoe, and placed it on his foot. He left his old shoe by the road, where perhaps another would find it useful, then skipped ahead to catch up with the others.

In the carriage, the man looked at the lady, and said nothing. He was smiling, most uncharacteristically.

Shoe Action

The girl stepped through the crumbling archway into the humid night.

She wrapped herself in the comforting cloak of the sea; the sharp odor of salt and the sound of waves as they broke across the jetty, sending a fine spray up to meet her. She could feel the old wood, ancient and strong, under her bare foot, and the grit of the sand in her toes as she considered the dark ocean below and in front of her, reflections of her lantern shivering in the mammoth waves like a firefly struggling in the web.

“Hurry Sheyn. Please.”

The voice was quiet, weaving and hiding itself in the Sea of Tears, blending with the waters, until she was not sure if she had heard it.

The girl looked west. The dark circles under her eyes imposed their years on her otherwise youthful features, and her mouth was drawn taut. The lighthouse loomed over the bay, giant and dark against the starless night, while a flicker of light danced on its lofty peak. The lens was slowly turning, offering a guiding light to fisherman and tradesman who traversed the waters at night. A trade ship was probably close. She could just make out the rowboat moored at lighthouse base, bobbing in the wake of the rising tide. Tomorrow morning the boy who lived in the lighthouse would row his sister across the bay for school.

“Help me,” whispered the waters.

It had been two moons since she had slept, because he would not let her. His pleas were forever there, but the closer she came to the ocean, the quieter his voice became.

She staggered, but did not fall. Sheyn casually lifted a foot, twirling in place on the edge of the wharf, noticing for the first time that she still wore only one shoe. She looked behind her. She had hoped that someone would be there, someone to hold her and cry for her, but her focus fell on her sandal, lying on the side of the road by the porch.

It sat, quietly mocking her.

She considered that hope was no more than a wish for the unlikely, then turned and stepped off.

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